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([personal profile] technoir Feb. 2nd, 2006 07:30 pm)
I walk up to the back door of the house. I was careful and quiet so as to not draw notice from neighbors who were still home. This house though was empty. the owners were left for work and school. I observed it for an hour to be sure. I should be in school as well, but this is not the first or the last time I will skip.

The steps have a slight creak to them. I heard it as the mother left. She works at the hospital as a nurse. I step with the long of the foot to cut down on the creak. That was a trick I had figured out on my own a while back. Of course you could not hear the noise at the next house and there was no one in the house to hear it now, but you mantain the disciplines none the less. Always assume you missed someone. You had before and almost got caught.

I put my hand on the knob. The shiver running up my spine is familiar. The door was unlocked. They often were. In a small town they just did not have the same paranoia. No one robs you when your gone. No one enters your house who you dont know. Well I do, but they dont know that. I slip in and glide through the foyer. Their walls are a deep stained color and the floor is hardwood. I stop and close my eyes. I take a deep breath and I can smell the house. They use a room freshener. Real houses dont smell like flowers.

I slowly walk through the house. each step is careful as I look around corners. My ears are peeked for even the slightest sound. The lights are off but the sun coming through the windows is enough to see clearly. I slowly check the interior doors. The girls bedroom. I look in and around. Pastel colors and soft things is my first impression. The girl is a little younger than my little brother. She apparently likes unicorns judging by her dresser. I move on. The Parents bed room is neat and clean. My own parents room was never neat. It was a mess. Hell, their relationship was a mess. They are a mess. Why not their room? I wonder for not the first time that all these people with neat little homes had neat little lives without complication? Do their parents fight? Do their children feel this?

I walk into the livingroom. A large fireplace dominates the room. It is is clean and looks unused. The mantel hold nice pictures of honest folk. The family is together in the pictures. All of them smiling and clean. I can't escape the feeling of being dirty. Like the debry of my family sticks to me as I leave my home. I settled myself into the large chair. This is a fathers chair. Thick and comfortable. I lift my feet and rest them on the devan. I close my eyes and the tension from the break in leaves me. I am not sneaking or breaking the law any more. At least not in my head. I am settleed in this other life. This is for a few hours my life. This is my comfortable home with out the residue of emotional tension. This my big comfy chair. This is my tv. The shower when I go take an afternoon shower is mine as well. I will leave it all here when I leave, but the few hours I am here it is all mine. I turn on the tv and live their life for a little while.

From: [identity profile] biff-rocko.livejournal.com


What a strange time we live in. Are you saying that you break into people's houses or is this some interestingly creepy story?

From: [identity profile] technoir.livejournal.com


it is a story. It may be creepy. And I dont break into peoples houses.

From: [identity profile] mastertwisted.livejournal.com


Nice atmosphere. If you don't mind, I'd like to edit this tomorrow, to see what you think.

From: [identity profile] mastertwisted.livejournal.com


Perhaps you assume I was going to change something. I was merely going to correct spelling and typographic errors in it, and make a suggestion for one malformed sentence.

Even professional writers have editors to make their work shine. I was offering this as a service, not a criticism.

From: [identity profile] dragonangel1369.livejournal.com

interesting.


very nicely written. I very much like the twist at the end when you're expecting him to start stealing stuff and all. I love the concept, and your writing style is very interesting to read. quite enjoyable. thank you for sharing with us. :) I'd love to read more of your work sometime if you ever feel like posting again.

From: [identity profile] smiths-hammer.livejournal.com


... And then the wife comes home and notices the wet towel in the bathroom. She accuses her husband of cheating on her, and they have a huge fight. He storms out, enraged from being falsely accused. She sinks into a pit of self-loathing and kills herself. The children both go mad.

Homewrecker.

:-p

From: [identity profile] biff-rocko.livejournal.com


That is actually disturbingly funny. I feel darkly amused.

From: [identity profile] pipistrella.livejournal.com


I am still amazed by the amount of rich material in your life, and I would be glad to see more stories like this.

The good stuff is almost always the painful stuff, you know. That's where the power is.

From: [identity profile] technoir.livejournal.com


I am glad you like. You maybe right, but the tough stuff to right is the tough stuff to think about to.
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